Shade- second in command - Mahi pride

[Shade]

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Name: Shade

Breed: Cheetah

Gender: female

Age: 3 years

Pride: Mahi

Rank: Second in command

Appearance: She's lean ( 100 lbs. ) and tall ( 1ft. 50in.) She has light, tan fur and dark grey splotches all over her pelt. She has golden-amber eyes. Her paws are small and her tail is 18 in. , giving her great balance. She has short, ruffled fur. Her ears are long, giving her great hearing. Her snout is very short and she has a small nose, yet it can smell something before you can hear it or see it.

Personality: She's swift and lithe. She's brave,due to having an arrogant streak. She's arrogant and self-cantered, but tries to do whats best for the pride. She's cruel and stern but she has her reasons(See history). She wants kits someday,but thinks she needs to protect the tribe rather than take care of them.She's sharp and has a very good nose.She's fiercly loyal, getting her into trouble(battles.) She's friendly and is a great fighter.She's never acually grown fond of hunting,and refuses to do it. She's cool and collected, keeping her organized.

History: Shade was born to the pride. Her mother died in a battle to Vhenu pride when she and her sister wer only kits. Her father was cruel to her and her den mother hated her. The fake mother gave her up to another cat,a snow leapard. This cat was different. She cared for her until she was one year old, for the female died of an unknown disease. As Shade grew up, she obeyed the leader, and kept what was rightfully Mahi pride's,due to her sharp and swift skills.She took care of her sibling and trained to fight everyday when she had the chance. She was soon the best nose in the pride. Now she fights for her mother and the snow leopard, to show that the unwanted one could survive,and save the pride.
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[glow=red,2,300]Other things of possible importance: im new here so.. if i get something wrong tell me,ok?ok.[/glow][/shadow]

[Punch]

Ok, you need to fix a few things, but this is a good start.

First off, I'm not sure if you used the form, but that's alright. You don't need the structure, just the elements.

That being said, you need a picture of your character, roleplayed by (whichi is your name), height and weight, and if they have any scars. If yes, where?

Also, please make the appearance and personality a bit longer. For appearance, describe eye color, pelt color, pelt condition (mangy, shaggy, etc.), body composition, each part of the body (ears, nose, paws, tail, etc.), and movement. For personality, I like to pick a few positive traits, and a few negative traits and describe how it affects them and why they are that way.

[Shade]

Fixed.